My second "Taking Risks in Technology" was much less of a total turn around compared to project 1. This is probably because it was written later in the semester after I had already learned new writing skills. Although this paper was better it absolutely was not perfect. One of the changes I made was rewording my thesis. I had originally had a two-part thesis which lowers my ethos, to fix this I reworded it so that it had the same meaning but was only one part. The next thing I corrected was fix an error that to some professors could have been considered plagiarism. To fix this I added a citation after my paraphrase of the authors words. Additionally, many of my explanations in this paper were weak to strengthen my ethos I added real examples of each idea so that they were supported in a strong way. Lastly, my first body paragraph needed some serious re-wording because it was very confusing. My strength in word choice clearly showed as I changed each sentence. After it was all said and done I think my paper is much stronger now.